4 16年1月14日雅思作文 回忆版本~~

TASK 1 题目：The number of people taking part in a wildlife survey in Britain between 2001 and 2009. A类小作文分析： 此次小作文考察的为表格题中的动态图。

要求对比分析的是英国在2001 年至2009年期间参与野生动物调查的成人及小孩数量。在文章的书写过程中首先要注意一个分段，那么针对动态图的书写，一般是根据时间的顺序推移写作，在注意趋势描写的同时也要注意两类人群之间的对比以及对总体数量的关注。

另外在时态方面，主要是一般过去时的运用。 范文：（word count: 193）TASK 2 题目： 青少年教育类 提问方式： 双边过论类 考试题目：A recent newspaper article reports that a 14-year-old boy who seriously destroyed his school got a punishment to clean streets instead of sent to the prison, do you think this is right? Or the young criminals should be sent to the jail. 分析： 作为16年首个换题月的第二场考试，这个题目着实是达到了它应该有的难度。

首先，问法较新颖，先是就题干中给的观点进行提问，然后又提问考生对另外一个观点的看法。所以这道题，其实就是对两个观点的讨论，可以转换成：Some people think that a 14-year-old boy who seriously destroyed his school should get a punishment to clean streets, while others think that young criminals should be sent to the jail. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 这样一来，这个题目对我们而言就非常热悉了。

对于“打扫街道卫生“这个立场，我们应该是支持的态度，因为题目中所提到罪犯年仅14岁，在大多数国家的法律当中，未成年人犯罪都是需要从轻处罚的。因此，我们可以用“1. 小孩子心智不成热；2.小孩子的可塑注较强，应当以教育型惩罚为主”这两个观点来支持。

对于“送进益狱”这个立场，我们则是持不支持的态度。那么我们的写法就应当是先让步：监狱可以使孩子明白犯罪的严重性，并且针对让步进行反驳：但是孩子可能会受到监狱中其他罪犯的不良影响，不利于心理发育。

【跪求批改！写了一篇雅思作文,各位大神帮忙看看能得个几分,要是

The high-speed development of modern society benefits citizens in various ways. Becoming a millionaire is not just a dream anymore. However, in spite of this, there are still a large number of individuals suffering from poverty. It is not unrealistic that the gap between the rich and the needy is becoming wider. It is crucial that we analyze the cause of this disturbing issue and explore an effective solution. From my own perspective, the causes are multiple.On the one hand, the strategies conducted by the authorities should be blamed to some extent. Taking China for an example, the government used to encourage some group to become rich so that（加 it ） can promote the poor to develop as a consequence . However, as a matter of fact, the rich have gotten away from the poverty, while the poor suffered（ 改为suffer ） more than before, which contribute to expand（ 改为expanding ） this gap even wider.On the other hand, this phenomenon could be a result from geographic location. For instance, people live（改为living ） in coastal cities are considered much richer than those living in inland areas. The main reason is due to（去掉due to ） that cities near the ocean have abundant resources and convenient transportation which can lead to the development between different areas. On the contrary, the inland, especially the remote areas lack usable resources and it is more difficult to communicate with other cities, that （ 改为which ） is why many villagers still live in an original society with poor living standard.This issue should be well taken into consideration. As to how to address this problem, people put forward various suggestions. The most important approach is that government should take action（改为actions ） to improve this situation instead of just paying lip services to it. For instance, establish a completed（改为complete ） tax system. Secondly, local government should invest more money in remote areas rather than building （改为build）more skyscrapers. Finally, the mass media should encourage（加people） to found some charities to help the poor.I believe with the joint efforts from individuals and government, this issue can be eventually improved.。

求雅思14.1.11的作文真题

Task 1 2014-01-11:The flow chart below shows the recycling procedure of glass bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant 写作分析：本文源自“雅思救星”。

本周，上海的考生迎来了一场开门红——流程图。许多烤鸭对流程图谈之色变，怀有很浓重的抵触情绪。

实际上，流程图只是个小怪物。我们只要正确对待它，其实流程图并不难解。

流程图的写作需要注意以下几个方面。第一，时态问题。

大多数流程图描述的是制造某个产品的过程或是某个原理，属于一般事实情况，因此大多为一般现在时。第二，分段。

流程图的分段较为灵活。单张图的情况下，可以根据各步骤分成两到三段。

两张图或以上的情况下，则每图一段。第三，顺序词，文章中要用清晰的顺序词将每个步骤清晰的表示出来，如at the beginning of the process, then, next等等。

第四，被动语态。流程图为体现客观性，避免人称的出现，基本上采用被动语态句式。

第五，烤鸭们在平时的练习中，需要积累一些特定的表动作的词语，如grind, transfer, roast, rotate, melt等等。 本周的流程图实际早在09年就已经考过类似题目，之后又出现过几次，可谓是出场率很高的经典题目。

这次的题目稍有改动，但基本思路一致，我们可以根据地点的不同用三个主体段来描写。具体内容如下： 写作思路： Body 1： 瓶子按三种颜色分类进行收集（separately collected according to colors of bottles），之后利用卡车将收集到的瓶子运送至processing plant去。

Body 2： 在处理工厂中，瓶子首先根据其瓶盖将其分为两类（metal tops and plastic tops），之后将两类瓶子分别粉碎（glass bottles are broken into pieces）。然后， 玻璃碎片被送至glass factory。

Body 3： 在玻璃工厂中，玻璃碎片（broken pieces of glass）和其他原材料（raw materials）一起放进熔炉里熔化成液体玻璃（melted into liquid）。最后（entering the final stage of this process），融化的混合物被制作成了新的玻璃瓶。

Task 2 20140111:Nowadays many young people choose to change their jobs frequently, eg. after a few years. What are the causes of the situation? Do the advantage outweigh the disadvantage？ 题目翻译：如今，许多年轻人选择频繁地更换自己的工作。这一现象的原因是什么？其优点是否超过缺点？ 考题分析： 大作文考试是混合型文体，由reason + argument组成。

往常的议论部分通常出现的问法是is it a positive trend或是do you think it is true等，这次则提问了正反双边。 文章结构很简单，除去开头结尾，文章正文可分为三段。

正文首段介绍原因，接下类两段分别介绍优点和缺点，但需注意的是，由于本题目提问优点多还是缺点多，因此在这两段的篇幅上要去侧重于自己倾向的那一方面。原因部分也可以从正反两个角度去考量，一方面可能是自身能力不够，另一方面可能是公司不能满足自身发展的需求，需要改变环境。

内容参考： Body1： 年轻人频繁跳槽的原因可能是复杂而多方面的（complex and manifold）。最为常见的一个原因是年轻人希望寻求更好的发展（better career development）。

原先的公司可能并不认可年轻人的工作（value the work of young people），或是发展受到了限制。另一个可能的原因（potential cause）是自身无法很好的融入原公司的工作环境，不能胜任自己的共工作。

Body 2： 频繁更换工作（frequent job-hopping）很可能会让年轻人在将来难以找到心仪的公司。如今，大多数公司倾向于雇佣忠诚度较高的员工（high loyalty），因为人才流失会使得公司损失大笔的培养成本。

Body 3： 然而，从年轻人的角度来讲，更换工作可以不断挑战自己（challenge themselves），挖掘自身的潜能（tap the potential）。另一方面，跳槽也有利于找到年轻人最适合的工作。

雅思大作文怎么写

ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task。

Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully。 Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time。

Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans。 Which do you prefer - planning or not planning for your leisure time? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice。

You should write at least 250 words。 model answer: Nowadays people have so many things to do that they almost always do not have enough time for it。

When we go to bed we carefully think and plan our next day and it continues day in and day out。 We wake up, recollect our checklist with things to do and in a few minutes we are already in a car on our way to the office。

Often people do not have time for themselves。 So, when people have some spare time they want to use it wisely。

Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully。 However, others prefer not to make any plans。

In this essay I will analyze both cases and present my view in favor of planning free-time activities。 From the one side, not making any plans and just letting the time pass by for some time have some benefits。

First of all, a person can just relax, enjoy the beautiful moments, spend his or her time with loved ones, watch a movie, listen to relaxing music, observe the flowers in bloom from the window, contemplate about his or her life and just slow down the pace of life。 I think it is a very good way to eliminate ones stress and tension and just leave all troubles and worries behind。

From the other side, careful planning can bring many benefits too。 First of all, one can travel。

However, traveling requires some planning to be made。 For example, one most likely will need a hotel room。

So, the reservation should be made beforehand。 Also, it is wise to check ones car to avoid breakdowns and have an uninterrupted worry-free trip。

Second of all, planning ones activities allows to spend ones free time the way he/she likes。 For instance, if I want to play tennis on incoming week-end I will certainly make a reservation for a court because in this case I will not be disappointed with the waste of my time。

Personally, I prefer to make plans for my free time because it allows me to spend my vacation or week-ends the way I want it。 To sum up, I think careful planning allows people to derive maximum benefits from their free time。

However, I must confess sometimes I allow my self just to stay at home with my friends and family and not make any plans。

请大神修改一篇雅思大作文

这篇文章你用一边倒的方式还更好，倒数第二段的论证其实反而弱化了你的立场。

当然，要保留第二段的话也有一个技巧，你可以以退为进。把它放在第一段或者第二段。

逻辑可表达为：虽然有些人认为学习语言的文化背景和生活方式没必要，因为。

，我还是倾向于认为。

。理由如下：论证的部分，你的力度一般，而且有些重复。

比如你第二段第二个点是"more quickly”，第三点又是“efficiency"，更快，和效率，这本身有重复的嫌疑。也就是说如果在找点上如果差别不是那么明确的话，还不如合二为一。

还有为了增加论证的力度，你除了用例证之外， 还可以用反证法。单词/语法/句式结构难度上，一般，语法错误不算多，（第二段中，during 是个介词，后面不能直接加完整的句子）但词汇和句式结构上也没什么亮点综上：应该是5.5分左右。

最高6，低可为5。.。

请帮我这篇雅思作文打个分,谢谢~（1月14号的题目）

1. As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of the former view. 这个用法有点问题，我认为我倾向于……！！！ 一般我们说：我认为，sth/sb……。

2.very 不能搭配 crucial ，道理和perfect相似，暗含最高级，前面不能用副词再修饰了。 3.to participate in it 去掉it。

4.furthermore关系副词用错，furthermore=moreover表递进关系。 It is very difficult for citizens to monitor the behaviors of private companies .你这个应该是第二个论点了。

和上句应该是并列关系吧，应该用then之类表并列关系连词。如果用递进关系你这几句就有点像：政府比民企更有实力……而且民企很难被监管。

感觉这样似乎逻辑有点问题。 5.but is also good for citizens 。

直接but for citizenc就好了 6.the above mentioned ，把mentioned 去掉 7.accordingly=therefore=so 所以 因此的意思。逻辑！！！ 8.fierce和 benign是一对反义词，如果你想表达可持续应该用sustainable 9.improve the development ,with the improvement/developement of，这两个词意思基本相等，这里翻译过来就成了提高发展，最好说促进boost 10. can be wasteful 这句话主语有问题，你想表达的应该是政府浪费税而不是政府这个机构是一种浪费。

11.by contrast那句后面就没有了吗？ 还应该有一句：诚然……但是……加强你的观点。 12.be generated by 是……由……引起 13.tax money 这个，tax已经包含money 的意思了 14.……………… 5.5。

雅思大作文生活习惯是怎样一篇文章

雅思写作的大作文题目会给出一个看法、问题或议题，考生需就此进行论述，写一篇议论文。

根据不同的情况，考生可能需要针对问题提出解决方法、论述和证明一个看法、对比和对照论据或看法、或者评价和反驳一个论点或观点。本文将为你带来一篇例文，大家可以先写写看，再对照文章哟~ You should spend about 40 minutes on this task。

Write about the following topic: In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyle of children are different from those of previous generations。 Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health。

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience。 Write at least 250 words。

model answer: It has recently been suggested that the way children eat and live nowadays has led to a deterioration in their health。 I entirely agree with this view, and believe that this alarming situation has come about for several reasons。

To begin with, there is the worrying increase in the amount of processed food that children are eating at home, with little or none of the fresh fruit and vegetables that earlier generations ate every day。 Secondly, more and more young people are choosing to eat in fast-food restaurants, which may be harmless occasionally, but not every day。

What they eat there is extremely high in fat, salt and sugar, all of which can be damaging to their health。 There is also a disturbing decline in the amount of exercise they get。

Schools have become obsessed with exams, with the shocking result that some pupils now do no sports at all。 To make matters worse, few even get any exercise on the way to and from school, as most of them go in their parents cars rather than walk or cycle。

Finally, children are spending far more time at home, playing computer games, watching TV or surfing the Internet。 They no longer play outside with friends or take part in challenging outdoor activities。

To sum up, although none of these changes could, on its own, have caused widespread harm to childrens health, there can be little doubt that all of them together have had a devastating effect。 This, in my opinion, can only be reversed by encouraging children to return to move traditional ways of eating and living。

14年10月18日雅思大作文,求评分及理由,

我觉得首段和尾段观点很清晰，每段句首的中心句的使用也不错，+论证：第二段，一般，表达上其实没什么问题，但是你只不过分项说了不同渠道可以给提供信息，其实还不如整合了一起讲，然后谈谈是哪些信息.如：There is no doubt that much can be learned about various cultures from books,TV programs and websites nowadays that provide detailed information about local customs,architectures,food,arts and sports .第三段中心句的表达应做一些变化了，而不是一直重复books,films,internet.（这跟第二段几乎一样）.论证上虽然算有层次，但感觉力度一般，而且次序可以调整一下以体现力度.比如直接接触和交流再加上实地观察可以放第一个比详论之，之后再论其他点.如：However,the second-hand experience obtained from reading books or watching TV can never be the same as what one sees and experiences in person..由于时间关系无法展开太多.不过看得出来你的英语功底是在的，语法及拼写错误算挺少的.在有限的时间里能写到以上的那些点也已经不错了.综上，我预测你的写作分数不出意外的话会是：6-6.5，如果大方点可看到7，严厉点的话5.5也是有可能.不过5.5的话，可能问题是在于你的词汇量的点缀不够漂亮（因为高频句型你用得很明显）以及论证地不够力度.不过考官审稿的时间也不长，除非非常老练否则也不见得那么仔细.所以预计是6-6.5最后.。