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这是几处拼写错误，不应该，多少会扣点分，估计

还有，有少量语法错误，不过教官应该看得懂，没多大问题。

如果你不会写deprive这个单词，你完全可以换成别的说法，同义转换，呵呵，同意转换在雅思中的听力，阅读，里面都是很重要的哟

至于能否得六分，呵呵，应该可以吧，你的观点鲜明，词汇也还用得比较准确，一般老外就喜欢这种文章

楼主喜欢用定语丛句，但，为什么不多用状语丛句呢？我更觉得，用状语丛句，更能表现英语的韵味。呵呵

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英文写作范文

With the technological progress of mankind, the beginning of the concept of fuzzy region, the world is an interdependent community, I rely on the production of your socks, you may rely on the production of ore I.On an island in a group of people on the island apart from a few of the necessities of life do not yield anything other than the production can not, on the island's residents in a shell called the RMB, as the money spent, that is, a 3 coconut shells, fresh water a 5 barrels of shells and so on. At this time we want a better life, but also the production of the island Dongdong not so much. Therefore wanted to use their own and other people for the labor.Not far away, this island has a large island, above everything, they use a shell called the USD to do transactions, then the residents of a small island to the big factory on the island of lobbying, we are low wages, cheap raw materials, there is no land-use costs, but also duty-free, that we invest it here. Big island of the rich feel justified on the island try to open a number of factories, but a question immediately, a small island on the island of RMB and the USD is 2:1, that is to say in Shell to sell two small islands of the Eastern Big Island also have to follow suit in a shell. Big Island although there are many disadvantages because of the factory, however, and the downstream lower transport costs associated with skilled workers, costs and products that the island is not much price difference. This time the chiefs on the island came up with a way to let everyone忽悠shaman on the island, a small island on the island of shells and the not the same as, the divine power on the island are so valuable, and our shells and their the shell is only reasonable to 8:1. We used to be a酱紫it, so on their own for eight shells of a large shell of the island. This island is the price and wage one-eighth of the big island, big island to the island on their table set up, made a lot of money, they return to Grand Island把钱汇development of science and technology, and then the development of the production of good products in the island. This past 30 years. . . . . .Big island slowly become less and less on the factory, all turned into a scientific research base, at the same time, scientific research base for the service industry people, such as shaved ALICE Yes Yes Yes Hospital restaurants and so on, of course, HD district, Ha ha. Grand Island residents have a lot of money, and they know that the factory island for their future can bring more money, and therefore they have to borrow money from real estate devoted son, in stocks, fried peanuts! ! ! What is speculation anyway, what! The beginning of the soaring price! Island chiefs saw the opportunity to make money Oh, and as soon as possible collusion shaman, but also the price of RMB and the USD has been set at 6:1, so the island's products普涨25%. Oshima suddenly one day the people of the East have found that all the speculation does not go up because no one took it, something too expensive, can not sell, so as soon as possible competing for a rock bottom price, want to sell their own Dongdong the market about Dongdong not all buyers. Factory owners on the island to see their production of the East can not sell. Had no choice but to close the plant back to the Big Island. This island can be fried like a nest myself! Back to hard one night 30 years before liberation! Are abhorrent to engage the chiefs and shamans of the ghosts, they look scared! ! ! At this time more anxious chiefs and shamans, how should we do? Watching their comfortable life can not be maintained. This time out of mind shaman. . . Emirates announced the next day in excellent shape and a smart casual invincible the entire K-shell of 4 trillion rescue package, that is, for all the islanders were transported to the island to the sea a stone, and then the stone back from the coast to, per person per day 1000 RMB shells, wages from the Emirates! ! ! Island residents are excited immediately shed all the tears, in praise of the wise leadership, and hula dancing after a home. Is finally a solution to meet the urgent needs of chiefs and shamans, but if things continue this way while Emirates FB, not so much filled shells inside it! Wizards this time also came up with one stroke. . . Another day, the shaman had come forward, he said all together: "Oh! I was ass kicked yesterday, in the twilight came upon a time in to see the fairy mm, that our immortal mm shells and the shell to Oshima 20:1 Yes! If there is a natural disaster of the tsunami! "Everyone can be a terrified, hastened to do so by the shaman said, this small island of shells and the shell is the largest isl。

雅思2009年10月24日大作文例文 200字左右

In present-day society, plastic containers and utensils are extensively used in big cities and the countryside alike. They are so common-place and I would hazard the guess that each one of us has seen, at one time or another, the unsightly scene of plastic bags swirling in the wind. These plastic shopping bags, chopsticks, to-go boxes and mineral-water bottles, to name but a few, when not properly disposed of, create a colossal amount of non-biodegradable refuse. Therefore, some people argue that we have embarked upon a “throw-away” era when plastic rubbish is largely dumped indiscriminately and irresponsibly (this act is often labeled “white pollution” on account of the color of plastic wastes). Personally, I wholeheartedly support their view. There are numerous reasons for this worrisome phenomenon coming into being. To begin with, at present the bulk of people who shop and/or eat out regularly are still poorly-informed, uninformed or misinformed about the pernicious influence that non-biodegradable pollutants exert on the ecosystem, which is the main culprit in the global-scale mishandling of the plastic wastes. The chief component of such trash is polythene, which cannot decompose on landfill sites over the process of the next hundreds of years if no major scientific breakthrough comes along in polythene treatment. Thus, such trash must be dealt with collectively rather than be scattered like tumbleweeds. Secondly, the proliferation of plastic shopping bags and eating ware is largely fuelled by the surging, headlong consumerism. Plastic containers and utensils are lighter in weight, cheaper (often free of charge) in price and water-proof in performance. These superior properties make them preferable to their paper and cloth counterparts in customers' eyes; and as consumer satisfaction reigns supreme in contemporary society, compared with superb portability, affordability and utility, how to dispose of them is the last thing the customers are concerned about. Additionally, plastic bags, wrap and containers are also commercially feasible since they are cheaper to manufacture, ship and store. These mercenary considerations also have prompted the good old cloth or paper bags to be supplanted by plastic bags but over the phasing-out process, few stores and restaurants advocate or encourage the use of environmentally-benign disposal of plastic trash, hence the whole slew of non-biodegradable garbage and environmental hazards ensue. Given the scale and severity of “white pollution”, we must take immediate steps to address this scourge. In the first place, we must do our utmost to enhance people's awareness of how persistent and devastating non-biodegradable trash can be to our environment and our posterity's. Secondly, retail stores and dining establishments should spare no effort in encouraging their customers to reuse plastic packing items. Furthermore, indiscriminate and irresponsible dumping of household garbage or personal junk should be outlawed by the legislature and heavy fines or even jail terms must be imposed on those compulsive litterbugs who fail to get their act together. Then, on the part of the biochemical researchers and technologists, scientific research must be launched here and now in pursuit of effectual ways to convert non-biodegradable refuse to biodegradable refuse. Last but not least, the government must not shirk its obligations in mobilizing scientific resources and rallying popular support in the crusade against “white pollution”. Neither should pay just lip service to relevant research and campaigns if no enough funding can be obtained otherwise. Additionally, I am convinced a customer tax levied by the government on the use of plastic bags will also help to curb this massive “white pollution”. The havoc non-biodegradable refuse can wreak on the ecosystem is beyond our imagination. It can eventually devastate soil, water and the aquatic and terrestrial biota. We must start combating this environmental catastrophe before the ecosystem irretrievably breaks down under the reign of the minute plastic debris.。

一篇英语作文

My good classmate, Li Lin,who is 16 years old , isn't tall and is always dressed simply . She works so hard and always tries her best to finish her homework by herself that she does well in all the subjects. She is kind to any persons and she is ready to help others. She is good at English and she always helps the classmates who are poor inEnglish with English. She has many hobbies, such as music and sports.。