剑11中的作文范文怎么像中国人写的和评的

调皮的表妹作文 简介：我的表妹今年5岁了，她天真活泼，机灵顽皮，非常可爱.一天中午，我和表妹坐在床铺上玩耍.她歪着脑袋，右手拿根红色的小塑料管，眨巴着一双明亮的大眼睛，调皮地对我说：“姐姐，咱俩用这根管子吹气，比比谁的气力的大，好吗？” “好… 我的表妹今年5岁了，她天真活泼，机灵顽皮，非常可爱.一天中午，我和表妹坐在床铺上玩耍.她歪着脑袋，右手拿根红色的小塑料管，眨巴着一双明亮的大眼睛，调皮地对我说：“姐姐，咱俩用这根管子吹气，比比谁的气力的大，好吗？”“好，现在就吹！”话音刚落，俩就喊着细管的一头，吹起来.我使出最大的力气，却吹不过她.我偷偷地看了一眼，一瞧，只见他在暗笑，红红的嘴唇紧紧地抿着，想在说“哈哈，你吹不过我吧！你真是个大笨蛋”难道表妹会有这么大的气力？我就不信我赢不了她小丫头！于是，我使劲儿地吹起来.我憋得脸红脖子粗，嘴巴都吹疼了，而表妹却冷不防地伸出小手，在我鼓得溜圆的腮帮上一捏，“噗哧”一声，笑了.这是，我忽然看见表妹那边管头上地有几个深深的牙印，这时，我才恍然大悟；她是把管子咬死了呀！我怎么能吹过她呢？我吐掉管子，伸手嬉戏着打她，表妹一闪身，嗖的跳下床，撩起门帘，跑到屋子外面去了，“咚！”表妹正撞在了刚要出门买菜的阿姨身上.阿姨假装生气地说：“你怎么啦？到处乱撞！像个石头人一样重，要是个孩子儿，非让你这下压成肉饼不可？”表妹笑得弯下了腰，用食指指着我，断断续续地说：“姐姐她.才是.‘石头人’呢！”说着，她跌跌撞撞地笑着地冲出了家门玩耍去了.这我的表妹，她是那样地调皮，机灵，天真可爱。

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剑11中的作文范文怎么像中国人写的和评的

调皮的表妹作文 简介：我的表妹今年5岁了，她天真活泼，机灵顽皮，非常可爱.一天中午，我和表妹坐在床铺上玩耍.她歪着脑袋，右手拿根红色的小塑料管，眨巴着一双明亮的大眼睛，调皮地对我说：“姐姐，咱俩用这根管子吹气，比比谁的气力的大，好吗？” “好…

我的表妹今年5岁了，她天真活泼，机灵顽皮，非常可爱.

一天中午，我和表妹坐在床铺上玩耍.她歪着脑袋，右手拿根红色的小塑料管，眨巴着一双明亮的大眼睛，调皮地对我说：“姐姐，咱俩用这根管子吹气，比比谁的气力的大，好吗？”

“好，现在就吹！”话音刚落，俩就喊着细管的一头，吹起来.我使出最大的力气，却吹不过她.我偷偷地看了一眼，一瞧，只见他在暗笑，红红的嘴唇紧紧地抿着，想在说“哈哈，你吹不过我吧！你真是个大笨蛋”

难道表妹会有这么大的气力？我就不信我赢不了她小丫头！于是，我使劲儿地吹起来.我憋得脸红脖子粗，嘴巴都吹疼了，而表妹却冷不防地伸出小手，在我鼓得溜圆的腮帮上一捏，“噗哧”一声，笑了.这是，我忽然看见表妹那边管头上地有几个深深的牙印，这时，我才恍然大悟；她是把管子咬死了呀！我怎么能吹过她呢？

我吐掉管子，伸手嬉戏着打她，表妹一闪身，嗖的跳下床，撩起门帘，跑到屋子外面去了，“咚！”表妹正撞在了刚要出门买菜的阿姨身上.阿姨假装生气地说：“你怎么啦？到处乱撞！像个石头人一样重，要是个孩子儿，非让你这下压成肉饼不可？”

表妹笑得弯下了腰，用食指指着我，断断续续地说：“姐姐她.才是.‘石头人’呢！”说着，她跌跌撞撞地笑着地冲出了家门玩耍去了.

这我的表妹，她是那样地调皮，机灵，天真可爱.

雅思作文求评分,谢谢啦

我觉得你写的不错，结构很清晰，论点和论据一目了然。长短句结合。也有例子具体的分数我不好评，因为我的作文也就考了6.5.我就说说我认为的不足的地方吧，希望能帮到你。

第一是按照你的观点，你认为先工作旅游是好的，那么主体写的时候最好先写你不同意的观点。也就是把你这两个主体段换一下位置。第二是如果你想拿高分，最好能用上一些好词来代替比较普通和简单的表述。第三是我觉得最后的conclusion说这样可能会让年轻人找到一些方向这个观点应该是一个新的观点吧？你的支持段里并没有说到这个好处。而结论段式不允许出现新的观点的，应该是总结你的陈述。如果你想加上这个支持观点可以写进主体段里。然后综上所示，虽然先工作旅游有一些缺点，但是它既可以增长知识，又可以帮助青少年更好的实现目标。所以你支持先工作旅游这一观点。

总体来看六分以上是绝对没问题的，如果结合你小作文也不错的话，六点五的可能比较大，当然没准儿对哪个考官的胃口七分也不是没有可能的。

批改作文 剑七 test2 task2

"基本完成了任务，5.5分 具体点评如下：点评1 Nowadays,a hot and important contraversy /controversy concerning the problem whether the punishments for each type of crimes should be fixed.全句没有谓语，而且whether 后面也不是句子。

这种错误一定要避免。可以在important后面加 is. Whether 后面可改成：whether punishments for each type of crime should be fixed 2 Some people contend that the consistent punishments seems to be fairer and more clearly/clear.while a large amount proporation/去掉 of people advocate that it depends on individual situation.I will present and analyde both views here.取其把题目几乎不做改动的抄一遍，可以选择其他的开篇方式，people have various opinions concerning whether punishments for each type of crime should be fixed. As for me， + 观点3 The first plain truth I want to emphasize here is that every crimes/crime has its own reasons and results/不相关，去掉，it can not be divided/judged simplity/simply from one aspect. So that the decision which considered/consider different circumstance turns to be positive reasonable. 论证有些浅，可以深度解释，也可举例，否则就成了喊口考了Furthermore, with the complicate motivation and action, there has/is not a boundry/boundary line/去掉 between two similar commitment in current days. The flexible punishment system will not fail to be one good way to show the society that the government care about them, and thus ,the general public are able to participate more in government policy determination/policy-making. Last but not least,the sdandadization of law has been improved rapidly in these years. Even two crimes lead to the same result, one's original intension to commite should be taking account /should be taken into account to replect/replace the regular law setup.4 Admittedly, fixed punishments have some merits. Under the fixed punishment system, the law enforcement officials have definite rules to follow. The crimes will make up some excuses for themselves to get/gain the jury's simpathy/sympathy , and escape from the judgment they due to/are due to receive. But with the developed law system, this problem can be solved efficiently. 跑题了这一段有一半是跑题的，要谈固定刑罚的理由，而不是如果避免法庭上不公平5 In conclusion,altough/although fixed punishment policy has deniable/undeniable advantages, I regard the flexible system as a better choice. It is the best way for us to get a clear perspevtive/perspective of what teh/the crimes got/what type of punishment law offenders should get relied on/according to their crimes what they have done/去掉.with such a perspective, we can own a more peaceful society."。

[英语阅读题]雅思剑8Test2ReadingPassage2第22题为什么答案选G剑8

这是一道选项summary 的题.首先要切记一点：此类题是乱序.所以虽然18,19是从C段中得出的，但是20,21,22并不一定出现在C段之后.20,21,22三道题是B段中得出的答案.首先20题的句子， 是第七行“the little ice age was far from a deep freeze, however, rather an irregular seesaw of rapid climate" 的同意转换.21题和22题中，你画出的关键词应该有描述气候的“cold winter 以及 heavy rain" ，带着这两个关键词，我们到倒数后三行去找寻，就能找到另外两个表示气候的答案了，即”storm" 以及22题答案（段尾最后两个单词“heat waves” .在这里提示一点：雅思阅读中在选择关键词上，最好选择实意词，这样能比较准的在文中定位.而像你纠结在“within it" 这样的指代词上，则有时会找不到准确的定位段.最后再说一点，选项SUMMARY 有时候是可以蒙的.像本题，既然说了”climate shift"， 那就能推测出应该既有表示低温的，也有表示高温的单词.既然有了cold winter 以及 rain， 那22题很有可能是出现表示高温的单词或短语，如是，很容易推断出 heat waves希望对你有帮助.希望采纳给分哦！~~。

剑5TEST2大作文求改,想知道自己最大的问题在那里？牛人们帮忙

帮你贴还没有看但是第一印象就是40分钟内你绝对写不了那么多.What,you maywonder,is the consequences of youngsters finding a job or beginning a travelduring the time of a year rather than entering the classroom in universityimmediately of who have just graduated from high schools and are going to befreshman in colleges.Although,inspired by their parents and teachers,he or she undoubtedlymake up his or her mind to explore the society and the world by a job or atrip,it seems that with some positive effects being brought,the negative onesalso emerge among above activities. Why these wayschose by so many young student become second to none on acquainting themselveswith real society can be illustrated by the cause that through normal teachingon class from high school to college only theoretical knowledge are absorbedcompletely by students.By contrast,the practical skills such as the ability ofcommunication are really hard to be taught at school,which need real backgroundsand visual negotiations with strangers.Because of this,if somebody look forwardto adapt cruel society in advance,it is necessary for them to spent such a yearon getting in touch with the real world.Furthermore,these future students incampus are easier to make friend with the strangers who they never meet bycooperating with others or helping each other during the trip.And the biggestadvantage they can obtain is that with the chance of ** every crucial decisionto cope with difficulties happened during this year,self-esteem would beencouraged and self-knowledge also can be fulfilled. However,likepatients take pills to control diseases accompanied by side effect,thedisadvantages of having interim year to experience the true world and becomemature in psychology are also brought about.Firstly,it is inevitable that aftergetting salary and earning money in work or enjoying themselves at touristsites the interests on study will naturally decreae and the attraction ofknowledge will deminsh at the same time,followed by the behaviours of skipingthe courses and giving up the goal in life.Even worse,there are manytemptations such as luxury hotels and modern pubs that lead to a wrong way tocourt material lifestyles and then make them hated in study. In myopinion,before starting the first social course in lifetime,the right guidancesfrom parents and teachers is essential to make sure that these vivid youthswill not be disturbed by bad things.only in this way,can these activities abouta year be useful for young people and the whole society.。