2016年1月雅思小作文范文

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TASK 1 题目：The number of people taking part in a wildlife survey in Britain between 2001 and 2009. A类小作文分析：此次小作文考察的为表格题中的动态图。

要求对比分析的是英国在2001 年至2009年期间参与野生动物调查的成人及小孩数量。在文章的书写过程中首先要注意一个分段，那么针对动态图的书写，一般是根据时间的顺序推移写作，在注意趋势描写的同时也要注意两类人群之间的对比以及对总体数量的关注。

另外在时态方面，主要是一般过去时的运用。范文：（word count: 193）TASK 2 题目：青少年教育类提问方式：双边过论类考试题目：A recent newspaper article reports that a 14-year-old boy who seriously destroyed his school got a punishment to clean streets instead of sent to the prison, do you think this is right? Or the young criminals should be sent to the jail. 分析：作为16年首个换题月的第二场考试，这个题目着实是达到了它应该有的难度。

首先，问法较新颖，先是就题干中给的观点进行提问，然后又提问考生对另外一个观点的看法。所以这道题，其实就是对两个观点的讨论，可以转换成：Some people think that a 14-year-old boy who seriously destroyed his school should get a punishment to clean streets, while others think that young criminals should be sent to the jail. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 这样一来，这个题目对我们而言就非常热悉了。

对于“打扫街道卫生“这个立场，我们应该是支持的态度，因为题目中所提到罪犯年仅14岁，在大多数国家的法律当中，未成年人犯罪都是需要从轻处罚的。因此，我们可以用“1. 小孩子心智不成热；2.小孩子的可塑注较强，应当以教育型惩罚为主”这两个观点来支持。

对于“送进益狱”这个立场，我们则是持不支持的态度。那么我们的写法就应当是先让步：监狱可以使孩子明白犯罪的严重性，并且针对让步进行反驳：但是孩子可能会受到监狱中其他罪犯的不良影响，不利于心理发育。

一篇雅思小作文,求专业人士修改加评分,

The curve graph describes the different demand for electricity in England between winter and summer,while the pie chart below illustrates the usage of electricity in an average family. From the two curves of the curve graph, it is clearly evident that the demand for electricity in winter is relatively higher than that in summer. As can be seen from the graph, the curve that acoounts for winter peaks at nearly 50000 units in about 23 o'clock,while that for summer is 20000 units in approximately 2 p.m. The second graph, presented in a pie chart, shows the proportion in quantity for uses of electricity. We can see from the pie chart that a greatest proportion, 52.5%of electricity, is used in heating up rooms or water. 15% is used for lighting and the like, and another 15% for electric appliances and etc. The statistics lead to the conclusion that electricity is most used to heating,and that explains the reason why the use of eletricity in winter is higher than summer. Changed some phrasings to add clarity. The essay, however, is generally clear and sound. Keep it up.。