求批改剑8 test4的小作文

bottomed at 应该是bottomed out at

还不错的，描述的很详细。但是句式还可以更加丰富，可以用定语从句。还有首句改写不可以仅仅换单词的。

可以这么改写：the line chat illustrates how quantities of goods were transported in UK from 1974 to 2002 through four main modes of transport.

如果要打分的话是6.5

【剑1作文】

“果然好剑……”把玩许久，伴随着一声叹息，一双纤美如玉的手轻轻捧着一柄光华夺目的绯色袖剑，交还给了它的主人，“清光绝世，冷彻入骨——也只有靖姑娘这样的人，才能压住血薇的杀气吧。”

被称为“靖姑娘”的绯衣女子只是笑了笑，不置可否的将那柄绯红色的短剑收入了衣袖，从旁边刀剑林立的架子上，随手拿了一柄长不盈尺的怀剑，细细把玩：“原来铸剑也是要合天时地利的——如今是四月，所以殷仙子才铸了这把‘国色’？”那柄怀剑显然是新铸的，刚发铏的刃口没有饮过血，尤自生涩。柄上细细镂刻着乌木的花纹，用泥金填了，做一朵盛放牡丹的形状，一旁刻了“国色”二字，十万分的旖旎与秀丽，竟不似一件凶器，反而是贵家名姬把玩的珍品。

阿靖轻轻吹了口气，将一根发丝吹向刃口，看着它无声无息的从剑刃两侧分下。唯有牡丹真国色，花开时节动京城。

剑是国色，铸剑师亦称国手。眼前的人，就是和邵空子齐名龙泉殷家的女铸剑师：殷流朱。

这个女子出身于龙泉铸剑世家，多年来一直隐居在吹花小筑，专为听雪楼铸剑。她铸造的利器流传天下，专刺诸侯豪杰，所向披靡，而这个名动天下的神秘铸剑师，却是一个方当韶龄的美丽女子。

殷流朱站在熊熊的炉火旁，一身的紫衣，束腰紧袖，漆黑的长发在头顶挽了双髻，各绾一朵金色银叶的绸花，耳边碎发用细细的金丝编成数十络垂坠于颈旁，眉间点了一枚赤红朱砂，风姿绰约，仿佛大户人家的端庄小姐。然而她的手指却是纤细稳定的，操纵沉重的锤子轻若无物，得心应手，眼睛更是深的看不见底，有如寂静的深渊，上面映着千种流云的梦。

“殷仙子不愧是龙泉殷家的人，铸的好剑——只怕数年以后，连血薇也未必能和仙子铸出的剑相抗呢。”阿靖轻轻弹了一下怀剑，听着它应和而出的轻吟，叹息，“只是……为何做的都如此玲珑精致，不盈一握？看来只有女子才适合用——如今这个江湖是男人的天下，这样的兵器，以后恐怕不便于流传世间吧？”“铸剑只是妾身的保命之技而已，流传于世什么的，无所谓。”

殷流朱站在熊熊燃烧的钢炉旁，掖了一下鬓角，唇角浮出一丝复杂的笑，“反正我下个月就出阁了，也不可能再做铸剑之事了。一场相识，这把‘国色’就留给靖姑娘吧，虽比不上血薇，也可聊作纪念。”

沉重的锤子击落在砧板上，火花四溅。在清脆的铁声里，阿靖收起小剑，嘴角浮出一丝笑——这样的女子，足当得起兰心蕙质四个字，似乎只适合在深闺毫宅里，拿着银针对着女红，或是执着玉勺调弄架上的鹦鹉。

然而此刻，这个娇弱的女子手里却铗着一条不过一尺长的烧红精铁，另一手用重锤不断的敲击砧板，不时拿起来看看，又放回原处继续锻烧。炉火映红了她秀丽的脸，额头沁出了微微的汗。

在等待新一轮熔烧结束的过程里，她终于得了闲，直起了腰对着阿靖叹息：“夕影血薇，无双利器，恐怕都有了灵性，不是光以用锋利可论……我穷尽一生心力，只怕也铸不出如此神兵，只能铸一些刺杀夺命用的俗物罢了。”一边说，她一边从角落的一个篓子中抓了一物上来，不顾它的挣扎纠缠，顺手取过一把小刀，一刀切断了喉咙，掰开，任无色的清水似的液体一连串的滴落在盛满了冷彻泉水的石槽内。

“九冥灵蛇？！”阿靖脱口低呼一声，看着女铸剑师手里还在不停挣扎的蛇。蛇嘴被掰开了，锋利的刀子割破了蛇的牙床，毒液从腮腺中一滴滴落下，化入石槽。

流朱不答，待毒液吐尽便甩手扔掉，复又俯身拎了一条蛇来，却是一条竹叶青。不知道过了多久，待一篓子的蛇都用完后，流朱转身，从熊熊燃烧的铁炉上迅速夹起了那长不盈尺的铁条，迅速浸入了石槽的毒液中。

“咝——”白雾从槽中迅速升起，宛如毒蛇忽然吐信的声音！烧红的铁在清冽的毒液中缓缓变灰，变冷，在它彻底冷却前，流朱快速的把它转移到了砧铁上，举起锤子细细而又迅速的敲击。阿靖只是在一边看着，那双纤弱的手下渐渐成形的铁，形状迅速变幻着，宛如法术一般的显出一枝钗子的样式来——原来，这一次殷流朱铸的不是剑，竟是一枝簪？阿靖默然吸了口气，目光有些肃然：“给谁打的，能让你这样费心？”在流朱再次把一尺的长钗放入毒液淬炼，然后将一旁早已用小锤另行打好的簪面拿起，用融金将两者锻化在一起。

打造成形的钗子上盘绕着栩栩如生的金凤，女铸剑师将它从水中提出，在台子上细细加工琢磨，串上晶珠宝石，宛如极美的工艺品。然而，钗子的尖端却是极端的锋利，泛着幽幽的黯淡的蓝色，仿佛毒蛇吐出的信子。

“我自己用的……”奇怪的，流朱低头笑了，眼神里带着幽幽的暗彩，“我自己出嫁时盘头用的簪子——你说，能不好好做吗？”穿好了珠子，翠华摇摇，奕奕生辉。拿起来，随手一划——“嗤！”生铁打造的架子，居然被那纤弱华丽的簪子划出一寸多深的痕迹！而且，在金钗划过的地方，白色的铁居然泛起了浓浓的黑色，滋滋作响，迅速的腐蚀着。

“流朱？！”阿靖的脸色变了，脱口问，“你——莫非，莫非是用来对付南宫家的……”“靖姑娘。”打断了她的话，流朱忽然抬头看她，轻轻道，“我幼年家门不幸，遭人欺凌父母俱亡——听雪楼收留我六年，我与萧楼主有约，铸剑。

剑10 test1 小作文什么意思

剑10test1小作文，家用能源和气体排放The above two charts depict the Austrilianhousehold energy use and the corresponding gas emissions of each type of energyuse.From the first pie chart we could see thatwater heating and heating are two major types of energy use, which occupies 30%and 42% of all the energy used in one household. Other appliances use 15% ofthe energy, and then refrigeration, lighting and cooling, which share the left13% of energy.Figures in the second chart are quitedifferent from that of the first chart. Heating, which consumes 42% of a household'senergy, only emits 15% of all the gas that one household produces. But the gasemission and energy use of water heating are pretty even, at around 30%. Costs only7% of all the energy, refrigeration produces 14% of all the gas, which goes forthe condition of other appliances and the figures are 15% and 28%, and for thecondition of lighting, 4% and 8%. Cooling consumes 2% of energy and contributesto 3% of gas emission.To sum up, water heating and heatingconsume 72% of energy and produces only 47% of gas. Refrigeration and otherappliances, though only use 22% of energy, emit 42% of gas.大作文， 教小孩是非观要不要从小时候就开始教， 要不要punishmentIndeed, children need to learn how to tellright from wrong as they grow into adults. But as far as I am concerned, it isbetter for us to teach this ability to them when they are older rather than atan early age. Moreover, certain punishments are required to make sure childrencould behave themselves.For starter, it would be easier for us toteach children about the difference between right and wrong when they becomeolder. Young children, due to their lack of life experience, have difficultiesin understanding moral lectures. However, after they grow up a little, theycould better digest the meaning of what is right and wrong based on their pastexperience, thus will grasp the notion of right and wrong more easily andthoroughly.Similarly, older children tend to know moreabout punishment, and will be able to learn from the punishment caused by theirfail to recognize the distinction between right and wrong. Punishment mighthave long-lasting influences on younger children for they are too fragile. Olderchildren, on the other hand, could handle punishment more with ease and couldfigure out the reason they got punished. Therefore, they could gain betterunderstanding about right and wrong than younger children do.The sort of punishment for parents andteachers to use whey they are trying to teach children about good behavior is asubtle issue. But the function of punishment is undeniable. It is necessary topunish a child because of his or her wrong acting. I suggest to use criticizeor physical training, such as asking children to do cleaning, as punishment.To conclude, teaching children about rightand wrong should be waited until children become older. Accompanied by certainways of punishment, the teaching process would be more productive.。

急求雅思地图小作文的范文

请结合笔者上述内容，操练以下经博主改编成的地图题范文选词填空练习，以加强你的雅思地图题写作。（笔者这里特注，题目与范文都来自《剑5》TEST3 中的TASK 1）

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words. The first potential location ( ____) is outside the town itself, and is sited just off _____to the town of Hindon, lying 12 kms to the north-west. This site is in the ______and so would be able to accommodate a lot of car parking. This would make it _____ to shoppers from both Hindon and Garlsdon who could travel by car. As it is also close to the railway line linking the towns to Cransdon (25 km to the south-east), a potentially_____ number of shoppers would also be able to travel by ____.

________, the suggested location, _____, is right in the town centre, which would be good for local residents. Theorically the store could be accessed by road or rail from the surrounding towns, including Bransdon, _____as the central area is a _____ zone, cars would be ____ to park and access would be difficult.

_______, neither site is appropriate for all the towns, but for customers in Cransdon, Hindon and Garlsdon, the out-of-town site (S1) would probably offer ____ advantages.

剑11中的作文范文怎么像中国人写的和评的

调皮的表妹作文 简介：我的表妹今年5岁了，她天真活泼，机灵顽皮，非常可爱.一天中午，我和表妹坐在床铺上玩耍.她歪着脑袋，右手拿根红色的小塑料管，眨巴着一双明亮的大眼睛，调皮地对我说：“姐姐，咱俩用这根管子吹气，比比谁的气力的大，好吗？” “好…

我的表妹今年5岁了，她天真活泼，机灵顽皮，非常可爱.

一天中午，我和表妹坐在床铺上玩耍.她歪着脑袋，右手拿根红色的小塑料管，眨巴着一双明亮的大眼睛，调皮地对我说：“姐姐，咱俩用这根管子吹气，比比谁的气力的大，好吗？”

“好，现在就吹！”话音刚落，俩就喊着细管的一头，吹起来.我使出最大的力气，却吹不过她.我偷偷地看了一眼，一瞧，只见他在暗笑，红红的嘴唇紧紧地抿着，想在说“哈哈，你吹不过我吧！你真是个大笨蛋”

难道表妹会有这么大的气力？我就不信我赢不了她小丫头！于是，我使劲儿地吹起来.我憋得脸红脖子粗，嘴巴都吹疼了，而表妹却冷不防地伸出小手，在我鼓得溜圆的腮帮上一捏，“噗哧”一声，笑了.这是，我忽然看见表妹那边管头上地有几个深深的牙印，这时，我才恍然大悟；她是把管子咬死了呀！我怎么能吹过她呢？

我吐掉管子，伸手嬉戏着打她，表妹一闪身，嗖的跳下床，撩起门帘，跑到屋子外面去了，“咚！”表妹正撞在了刚要出门买菜的阿姨身上.阿姨假装生气地说：“你怎么啦？到处乱撞！像个石头人一样重，要是个孩子儿，非让你这下压成肉饼不可？”

表妹笑得弯下了腰，用食指指着我，断断续续地说：“姐姐她.才是.‘石头人’呢！”说着，她跌跌撞撞地笑着地冲出了家门玩耍去了.

这我的表妹，她是那样地调皮，机灵，天真可爱.

剑10 test1 小作文什么意思

剑10test1 小作文，家用能源和气体排放 The above two charts depict the Austrilianhousehold energy use and the corresponding gas emissions of each type of energyuse.From the first pie chart we could see thatwater heating and heating are two major types of energy use, which occupies 30%and 42% of all the energy used in one household. Other appliances use 15% ofthe energy, and then refrigeration, lighting and cooling, which share the left13% of energy.Figures in the second chart are quitedifferent from that of the first chart. Heating, which consumes 42% of a household'senergy, only emits 15% of all the gas that one household produces. But the gasemission and energy use of water heating are pretty even, at around 30%. Costs only7% of all the energy, refrigeration produces 14% of all the gas, which goes forthe condition of other appliances and the figures are 15% and 28%, and for thecondition of lighting, 4% and 8%. Cooling consumes 2% of energy and contributesto 3% of gas emission.To sum up, water heating and heatingconsume 72% of energy and produces only 47% of gas. Refrigeration and otherappliances, though only use 22% of energy, emit 42% of gas.大作文， 教小孩是非观要不要从小时候就开始教， 要不要punishment Indeed, children need to learn how to tellright from wrong as they grow into adults. But as far as I am concerned, it isbetter for us to teach this ability to them when they are older rather than atan early age. Moreover, certain punishments are required to make sure childrencould behave themselves.For starter, it would be easier for us toteach children about the difference between right and wrong when they becomeolder. Young children, due to their lack of life experience, have difficultiesin understanding moral lectures. However, after they grow up a little, theycould better digest the meaning of what is right and wrong based on their pastexperience, thus will grasp the notion of right and wrong more easily andthoroughly.Similarly, older children tend to know moreabout punishment, and will be able to learn from the punishment caused by theirfail to recognize the distinction between right and wrong. Punishment mighthave long-lasting influences on younger children for they are too fragile. Olderchildren, on the other hand, could handle punishment more with ease and couldfigure out the reason they got punished. Therefore, they could gain betterunderstanding about right and wrong than younger children do.The sort of punishment for parents andteachers to use whey they are trying to teach children about good behavior is asubtle issue. But the function of punishment is undeniable. It is necessary topunish a child because of his or her wrong acting. I suggest to use criticizeor physical training, such as asking children to do cleaning, as punishment.To conclude, teaching children about rightand wrong should be waited until children become older. Accompanied by certainways of punishment, the teaching process would be more productive.。

仙剑十二年征文启示众所周知我们心目中的神话-《仙剑》于今年7月

很汗颜地贴半篇文章……实在是不忍心写下去啊…… 写思堂不幸被PIA倒的时候眼泪都快出来了……最后决定删掉直接从对话开始写……是否说明偶心理素质太差？ 采用第一人称注定是一个错……太入戏了。

太爱璇璇和堂堂的后果…… 废话好多，打住。 [醉里悲歌惊深梦] 我紧紧地攥住那只手，生怕一个失神，它便会迅速地冰冷下去。

然而，指间的肌肤依旧由内而外地冰冷，伴随着灵力的溃散。 “经络……俱碎，已……已是无……用的躯……躯体了，何……何必再……” 仿佛感知到了我凝在指尖的内息，他断续吐出一语。

“难道……可……可只是一击之力……” 我近乎茫然地望着他胸口贯穿性的巨创，双手不自觉地松开，喃喃。 “对不起……说好……一……一起战斗的……我……先走……一步……了……” 他的声音，竟是从未有过的艰涩。

“不！不……思堂！你都在说什么！你不会的！” 颤抖着双手，我撩开他的面上的乱发，胡乱地拭着那些不断溢出嘴角的血沫。 “不要……这样……这……这不像你……” 他微微扯了扯嘴角，试图显出几分微笑的神情。

“别……别这样用力……会损耗更大……我一定有办法！” 这样说着，我却第一次觉得如此焦虑而无措，只顾抬手封住伤口附近的几处大穴，血流立缓。 “不……不必徒劳……已经……够了……”竭力抬起一只手，他止住了我。

“思堂，你……你实在为我做了太多……”放弃了最后的尝试，我颓然低语。 “这都是……我甘愿做的……我喜欢这样……你不是……也一直……容忍我的……坏脾气吗……” 他浸染了血污的眉眼间，竟有几分欣慰。

“别……别这么说，那不是什么坏脾气，我也……喜欢那样的你，没有什么容忍不容忍的……” 努力止住哽咽，我用尽可能平静的语调说。 “璇……是真心话……还是……安慰我？……算了……不管怎样……我……我不后悔……” 蓦地，只剩下一地的寂静。

“思堂！思堂——” 猛然察觉到方才一瞬他神智的模糊，我立地握住他的手腕。 已然迟了。

他的身体开始以惊人的速度委顿，仿佛里面的魂魄早已与那最后一语一道游离体外。 消失了……完全消失了…… 眼前有迷朦的朔雪……是我的泪眼，还是那挥之不却的旧梦？ [挟长剑，带吴钩] 墨也似的夜空，晦月，残星。

“真是……难得的清寂呢。”我无聊赖地倚在案几上，拈起方才送来的刻花白玉杯，把玩着。

“星璇大人，有客求见。 ”翔轻叩雕门，语调却不似往日平静。

“是么……来者何人？”懒懒放下玉杯，我抬眼。 “在下思堂，求见星璇大人。”

是个陌生的声音，波澜不惊，却又有着某种难以言喻的深沉之力。 我下意识地握紧了身侧的破邪，起身。

“在下星璇。”拉开虚掩的雕门，我礼节性地颔首。

抬眼，面前是一张冷定的面容，有着碧色的双眸。 而最引人注意的，是他手中的一柄异形长刀，通体玄色，质地非金非玉，显得莫名的沉重。

刀锋处冷光盈动，隐隐透出逼人的寒意。 “在下思堂，请求与星璇大人一战。”

来人无半点客套，只是硬生生地开口，截断了我方才的思绪。 “一战？”我蹙眉，“无怨无仇，何战之有？” “为了追求更强大的力量而已。”

他淡然道。 “更强大的力量……呵，为何选中了在下？”我没有拒绝，只是同样淡然地反问。

“是它，它选中了你。”来人垂了眸，微微弹了弹手中的长刀，“它，能感知到某些强大力量的所在。

” “这柄刀……”我愕然，再度望向那刀，竟觉得刀锋处的冷光已然跃跃欲动，作势欲扑，“那，便堪称神器了。” “实不相瞒，此刃名曰‘怒龙’，乃在下爱物。”

来人的语调于冷定之中又多了几分迫切，“思堂携怒龙，恳请与星璇大人一战。” “呵……好！翔，带众人退避，勿要插手。

” “可……星璇大人……”翔的眼中有几分忧虑，脚步迟迟不动。 “那末，你我商定，比试身手即可，决不取对方性命，如何？” 来人不语，只是微微颔首，算是应允。

“星璇大人，请小心。”翔深深俯首，随后带着众部下离开。

********************************************************* 沁凉的夜风拂过，发丝轻扬，天地间蓦地静寂。 “在下不客气了。”

我微微扬了下嘴角，右手紧扣破邪，暗暗将力量凝聚到指间。 “恕在下无礼。”

对方亦只是简短地吐出几个字节，手中的怒龙霍的一亮！ 即刻，平地上沙石飞掠。 “好生接着！”我忽地跃起，破邪挟着强大的内力直直挥出，三道爪尖上锋芒暗涌。

“退！”对方刀刃逆转，一声断喝，竟生生格住了三道锋芒！ “逼！”我厉叱，爪尖金光暴涨，再度袭向对方。 （…………未完，看着办…………） PS：这篇的风格和上一篇差不多，估计也不会被录，就草草吧~~~ 有句话说得好，叫“重在参与”，咔咔~~~。

请问老师们有慎小嶷十天突破雅思写作剑13/14pdf （网盘）吗？ 感激

电子书介绍

本书是留学英语考试语言专家慎小嶷（Pat）老师的力作。书中紧密结合剑桥大学出版社出版的“剑12”和《剑桥雅思官方指南》（The Official Cambridge Guide to IELTS）所体现出的新趋势，富有创造性地总结出了帮助中国考生突破IELTS写作瓶颈所需的全部应试技巧，并用地道英语对大量语言点进行了深入讲解。书中全部例句均取自近两年中出版的英美本土出版物和剑4——剑12以及《剑桥雅思官方指南》里的官方范文。本书还配有由native speakers外教朗读的音频文件下载，以及方便读者随时随地学习的便携式学习手册，有助于读者高效利用备考时间。

慎小嶷十天突破雅思写作图书目录

致读者英文自序

Day 1其实你不懂雅思写作

多数中国考生无法回答的10个问题 /

My Answers /

Day 2你写的句子读起来为什么“作”

写好3种句子 /

Day 3知错就改——语法和用词的陷阱

中国考生在IELTS作文里最容易失手的词汇总结 /

Day 4经得起推敲的结构

4段式PK 5段式 /

Day 5思维的乐趣——让ideas更充实的秘诀

IELTS作文言之有物的“物”到底是什么 /

头脑风暴≠头脑“疯暴” /

IELTS作文最常用的12条思路线索 /

Day 6带着平常心去写作

——写好议论文展开支持句的秘诀

到底什么是well supported? /

native speakers怎样想展开支持句？/

Day 7别了，“中式英语”——

120急救短语

可以覆盖IELTS议论文全部话题的实用论证短语 /

Day 8真实的高分范文——比你想象的简单

剑桥官方提供的真实范文分析 /

高分范文不是模板的试验场 /

Day 9图表题，能提前写完吗

小作文的3个核心要求 /

决定Task 1成败的基本功 /

开头段的写法 /

介绍数据或描述变化趋势的常用词一网打尽 /

主体段的写法 /

小作文结尾段的写法 /

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介绍剑龙作文300快啊

您好，很高兴能为您解答，关于这个问题，我为您做了以下的解答：

介绍剑龙

剑龙为一种巨大，生存于侏罗纪晚期四只脚的食草动物。它们被认为是居住在平原上，并且以群体游牧的方式和 其他如粱龙的食草动物一同生活。

它的背上有一排巨大的骨质板，以及带有四根尖刺的危险尾巴来防御掠食者的攻击。大约可达12米长和7米高，可 重达7吨。

剑龙长着个像鸟一样的尖味，咏里没有牙齿，但嘴里的两侧有些小牙。剑龙的背上有17块板状的骨头，在它尾巴 的尖端还有着长刺。这些刺有4英尺长。

剑龙是完全用四足行走的恐龙。大小与大象差不多，但体形却大不一样，前肢短，后肢较长，整个身体就像拱起 的一座小山，山峰正好处在臀部。令人惊奇的是，从发现的化石得知，剑龙的背上有两排三角形的骨板，从颈部排到 尾巴，宛如一把把插着的尖刀。这些骨板有什么用处呢长期以来，不少人对这个向题进行过研究，但是意见不一，至 今还是一个悬案。有人认为，骨板可以起到保护身体的作用。因为在侏罗纪的时候，陆地上的恐龙开始繁荣起来，肉 食龙个体逐渐增大，这对食植物的剑龙威胁是很大的，剑龙只有以背上“刀山”一样的骨板防御敌人了。但是，身体 裸露的地方怎么保护呢所以有人又认为，骨板实际上是一种“拟态”，用于迷惑敌人。剑龙的骨板上带有各种颜色的 皮肤和一簇簇像本内苏铁植物一样的东西，把自己装扮得不易被其他动物发现。