求批改SAT作文

famous attractions within several hour. But these changes only render ↓

famous attractions within several hour,but ,in my opinion, these changes only render

students 例子解释太短 缺乏说服力 至少加上word自带纠错让他们懒得自己检查或者网络词汇的简写表达影响他们的语法结构吧

Another example is the Internet↓

Another example is the (decreasing public attention to the traditional events/culture loss) caused by the Internet

Statistics from government shows that firework during Spring Festival, a traditional Chinese festival is decreasing annually↓

Statistics from government shows that the amount of fireworks consumed during Spring Festival, a traditional Chinese festival, is decreasing annually

Convenient conveyance saves us large amount of time to travel long distance这句完全诡异

Convenient conveyance helps us save large amount of time during long journey

automobiles and phones that they rid themselves of the "trouble"-walking. But survey ↓

automobiles and phones with which they can rid themselves of the "trouble"-walking, but survey

上面是我看到的语法

不过主要问题还是：例子数量大且每个都不充分 句子间缺乏逻辑联系 连接词少 语法单一

优点 用词不错

SAT作文语句求修改

你的文章真题写得很不错——语言功底很扎实，学习了！里面的个别地方在此商榷，以作交流——————When 【he 最好换成所知道的人名字，写人些事，都是让读者更多地了解此人.】found the great potential of his website Facebook，【he 或者替换这个代词为名词】realized that a golden entrepreneurial opportunity was coming【 .分为两个句子】【He then 用并列形式，两种时态不对应，容易导致费解或误解】made an unexpected decision：【to drop/dropping out of college and establish/establishing his own company to operate the website.多用短语表达】2.In the18th and 19th century,it seemed to be the only task for most women to take good care of their husbands and children rather than 【pursuit(n)改为 pursue(v)】 any challenging goals.这个句子写的很不错！不过，如果改变一下，也许效果会不同：In the18th and 19th century,taking good care of their husbands and children seemed to be the only task for most women rather than 【pursuing 】 any challenging goals.要表达的主要意思得到强调或突出！3.It 【was——is 当做客观事实，应该更好，而且与后面的 for decades搭配】 his initiative contribution to modern music,dance,and fashion that made him a global figure in popular culture【 for decades.几十年来（一直）】强调句型使用很成功！4.After 【his——变成人名加所有格形式，可以让读者记忆此人】 death in 2008,his splendid performances were still imitated by contemporary artists.。

SAT作文：Whatdrivespeopletoworkhard？有什么例子可以举？THAX~-

我的回答是是的第一段引出，点明中心观点——focusing on goals make people more upbeat and concentrating,besides,achieving goals after hard work can bring you true happiness,that is the happiness of encountering difficulties then embrace success.第二段举的例子是科学界的——居里夫人.着重描写她为了科学研究付出的努力，怎样怎样艰苦，同时做一个对比——她并没有像但是一般的那些妇女一样追求什么个人的肤浅的一时快乐，最后他成功了，并且适合他最心爱的人一起，他的研究帮助了人类很多，这才是真正的不朽的快乐.第三段据反例——现在有些享乐主义者hedonists——譬如一些学生，不好好学，追求快乐而不追求实际的目标，最后人生的路却越发难走，得不到永久的，真正的快乐.而有的学生却设定目标，达到目标会有成就感，信心和别人的认可，得到真正的快乐.第四段结束.主要是这样的：goals象征的是痛苦后的快乐，这和直接追求快乐是不同的，而第一段的例子来自哪些所有你知道克服困难，奋斗过了的人都可以，这样例子就很多了.所以思路要打开，看看它问的两个对立的东西实质代表的是什么。

SAT 作文,8个经典例子！

SAT写作部分及满分范文 ？？SAT考试写作部分满分为800分，考试时间60分钟。

写作试题由两部分组成，一部分为语法及英语惯用法的选择题型，这部分考试时间为35分钟，其分数约占SAT写作800满分的70%；另一部分为作文写作测试，考试时间为25分钟，其分数约占写作800满分的30%。国内备考SAT学生，通过有效的指导、大量的练习、在英语语法及惯用法的选择题型考试部分，一般可获取较高的分数甚至满分。

？？SAT作文的满分为12分，考生要在25分钟时间内，依据试题要求，写出一篇完整的议论文。作文的字数没有硬性规定，但作文的篇幅约有一张半A4纸的大小。

考生要用铅笔写作，写满作文规定的篇幅，一般要用500至700个英语单词。每一篇考生的作文由两个判卷老师打分，每个老师给的分数为1至6分，两个判卷老师所给的分数之和，即为考生作文的分数。

？？SAT作文6分的判分标准为，完整掌握、见解深刻、技巧娴熟；5分的判分标准为，有说服力、文章组织较好、语言使用有变化且准确；4分的判分标准为，会写作文、内容足够、表达充分。从这里可以看出，国内考生通过有效的辅导与训练，获取作文8分的成绩不难，英语基础好的考生，取得作文9至10分的成绩很有可能。

？？一篇好的SAT作文要满足如下几个要求，即好的内容、好的论点与论据、清晰且恰当的举例说明、段与段之间有好的逻辑关系、观点鲜明与清晰及较好的英语写作掌控力、有变化的句型与词汇。考生要尽力避免观点模糊不清、在议论文当中一会儿说对一会儿又说错、语言表达单一、不以理服人、自以为是给人强加自己的观点、字迹不清及文章太短。

SAT作文练习范文有哪些？ -

I have several ideas why it is personal satisfaction and not money or fame that urges people to succeed. My belief is after you succeed in something you do you feel good about yourself, you feel as you just successfully completed your mission that you made for yourself and it makes you feel good inside. For example, after an actor wins an Academy Award, I think he does not think about money or fame but instead he or she feels as she is great at her job and it makes that person complete and happy inside. Another example are authors who usually never got famous or wealthy when they are alive, but its rather the personal feeling of fulfillment of happiness that inspires them to write great stories. Those are several reasons why I think its personal feeling and satisfaction and not fame and fortune that inspires people to succeed.。