剑桥雅思6test2 小作文,高手来估分,谢谢

"per person per year" can be used in speaking but not academic writing.

You should not use "we" in academic writing as well.

"the chart describe us" is a translation of Chinese which has a grammar mistake. It should be "the chart tells us" but unfortunately, not in academic writing again. U may use "the chart shows that the trend of travelling more often than before。

What do u mean "As the car saw a dramatic growth"? I guess it's another grammar mistake.

"In sum" should be "in conculsion" or "In summary".

Generally speaking, your essay is not bad but it should not be scored over 6. One of the reason is that you just list all the figures rather than comparing them. For example, it would be much better if you said "Taxi is more popular because its recent figure is more than 3 times than the previous one."

The other reason is you didn't point out the trend that people prefer to go further. That's why the usage of car, long distance bus and taxi increases but walking and bicycle drops.

I suggest that you should spend 2-3 mimutes to analyse and find out the relationship between the figures first. Then you can start writing.

Practicing more helps you to improve your writing skill. Good luck and fighting!

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剑桥雅思6test2 小作文,高手来估分,谢谢

"per person per year" can be used in speaking but not academic writing. You should not use "we" in academic writing as well."the chart describe us" is a translation of Chinese which has a grammar mistake. It should be "the chart tells us" but unfortunately, not in academic writing again. U may use "the chart shows that the trend of travelling more often than before。

。What do u mean "As the car saw a dramatic growth"? I guess it's another grammar mistake. "In sum" should be "in conculsion" or "In summary".Generally speaking, your essay is not bad but it should not be scored over 6. One of the reason is that you just list all the figures rather than comparing them. For example, it would be much better if you said "Taxi is more popular because its recent figure is more than 3 times than the previous one."The other reason is you didn't point out the trend that people prefer to go further. That's why the usage of car, long distance bus and taxi increases but walking and bicycle drops.I suggest that you should spend 2-3 mimutes to analyse and find out the relationship between the figures first. Then you can start writing. Practicing more helps you to improve your writing skill. Good luck and fighting!。