7分雅思作文高分范文及翻译：如何解决垃圾问题

1：语法错误就太多了啊。

if a person does not work hard.:2：还有句子表达也很不清晰。这个第二段没看明白要表达啥。

。：3:With thedevelopment of society,more and more folks take part in a kind of activitieswhich are sports and music.这个句子忠实英文口味太重了。

建议可以该为Economic development provided more opportunities for people to enjoy sports or music after work.（或者这句不是你想要表达的意思） 上面只是大概扫了一眼，这篇作文还有很多要润色的啊。

雅思写作67移民类请求/求助信写法

一、前言雅思写作移民类书信的种类包括投诉/抱怨信、请求信、推荐信、申请信、建议信等；了解书信的类型有助于考生使用精准的语言表述写信的目的；明确收信人身份（是朋友、老师、上级、陌生人、同事、商业伙伴、销售方），可以使用恰当的正式程度以及考生写作时的措词；清楚书信任务个数，有助于考生在个人语言能力有限的情况下，拿到相对合理的任务完成分数。

本文主要侧重于介绍投请求/求助信的写法.二、请求/求助信请求信在雅思书信写作中的出现频率仅次于投诉/抱怨信。对请求信的掌握，不仅有助于考生备考，还有助于考生们将来在国外的学习、生活和工作。

（一）高频考点1、阐述自己的打算以及需要帮助的理由（explain what you are going to do and why you need help）;2、阐述自己需要哪方面的帮助（say what you want him/her to do for you）;3、表达谢意（express your gratitude）。（二）写作实例下面以真题话题为例，具体展示请求/求助信的写作过程。

（20081206） You are away on holiday for several weeks and then hope that one of your friends will look after your home. Write to him/her and in your letter,lexplain why you need helplshow where the key islexplain what do you expect him/her to do when you are away1、审题该话题要求考生写一封请求信，收信人为自己朋友（属于非正式的文体），主要有三项任务（解释需要帮助的原因；讲明钥匙所在；解释自己不在时需要朋友做什么），需要在主体部分（Main Parts）完成。2、写作过程展示Dear Catherine，（称呼）I wonder if you could spare some time attending to my home while I am away for my annual paid holiday.（写信目的介绍段）The holiday, as scheduled from April 3rd to May 1st,will last around 4 weeks. This thus means that I cannot return until May 2nd, and that is why your timely help is of great significance to me.（任务一：explain why you need help）Keys to my door are available if you drop in at my company on your way home after work and ask the beautiful slim receptionist called Serena for them.（任务二：where the key is）When I am on my holiday, you have to take the trouble to feed and walk my German Shepherd "Rain" on a daily basis. Besides, you are expected to water the 3 plants at the backyard at regular intervals. After fulfilling these tasks, if time permitting, please pick up my letters, water/gas/electricity bills and my subscribed newspaper "Financial Times" and then put them into the top drawer of the desk in my bedroom. All these tasks are for certain to lay you a huge burden.（任务三：what do you expect him and what do you expect him/her to do when you are away.）I would be greatly grateful to you if you could lend me a helping hand at such a critical time and I am looking forward to hearing from you.（结尾段：表达谢意，请求回复）Best wishesHelen Y.（落款签名）（三）注意事项1、开头段落格式要规范；2、主体部分要尽可能详尽，所提出的请求具有客观性、合理性和可行性；3、结尾表示希望对方回复，并表示感谢。

三、其他请求/求助信（一）20110726You come back home from travel but find an item of clothing was left in the hotel. You write a letter to the manager of the hotel for this matter. You should(1) describe the item of clothing;(2) point which place it would be;(3) tell the manager what you want him/her to do if find out the item of clothing.（二）20080726You come back home from travel but find an item of clothing was left in the hotel. You write a letter to the manager of the hotel for this matter. You should(1) describe the item of clothing;(2) point which place it would be;(3) tell?the?manager?what?you?want?him/her?to?do?if?find?out?the?item?of?clothing.？（三）20080830You rent an accommodation for a week and you found that there were problems with the accommodation. Write a letter to the owner and inform him or her:(1) what the problems were;(2) describe consequences of the problems;(3) what actions would you want the owner to take to solve the issue.（四）20120721You have written an article to a magazine about your job, and ask your manager to make some comments on it.(1) explain why you wrote the article(2) What have you written(3) What you would like your manager to comment.（五）20130202You are going to travel for a week. Write a letter to your neighbour and ask him to take care of your house when you leave. In your letter, you should tell:(1) what you are going to do;(2) what you want him to do for you;(3) what he should do if something happens.四、结语本文主要讲解了关于雅思写作移民类小作文中请求/求助信的写法；范文解析完毕后又附加了五个典型的历年考题，以供考生在备考时有目标、有方向地加以练习。

请帮忙修改一下这个雅思G类小作文,感谢信. 谢谢

Dear Sue,I am writing to express my sincere thanks to you for assisting me to be prepared for my new terms.(term)As you know, the city of Ottawa, which I will spend my next two years here（删除here） for my Master's degree, is a complete(ly) unfamiliar city to me since this is my first vist(visit) here. I felt a little bit dazed at first. If it hadn't been your assistance, offering me the guidance and backing me up, I would not have had everything settled right before my new start.I moved into my new domitory and shared it with another two(two other) local students here（删除）. The technician from Bell has(had) set up my internet modem and router. Everything now works just fine. I think I am now prepared(ready) for the new beginning. By the way, thanks to the guidance you offered, I had a short tour to Parliament Hill yeasterday(yesterday) by taking a bus(by bus). I know there (are) so many other famous palce(place) in this city, for example, the National Gallery of Canada and the National Museum, that I have not got a chance to visit, however, they are definately(definitely) on my "Must-Visit" list. Anyway, you are more than helpful to me. I really appreciate that. Please accept my truehearted thanks again.Yours respectfully,(sincerely)。