一、剑桥雅思6 写作 test2 第一篇小作文 书上只有一个6分的考生作文 求范

雅思写作参考书，我选哪本

在雅思考试当中最让人头疼的可能就是写作了，见过太多的从4.5到5.5挣扎很多次却依然距离6分很遥远的同学，惋惜之余，也在想什么原因导致了这些同学的悲催现状呢。

辅导资料我们并不缺，市面上各种写作指导不下30种。写作理论体系也不缺，什么单边式，双边式，让步式，不一而足。对于一个7分的文章应该是什 么样，大家也是各说各的。虽然有我们有统一的评分标准的指导，但是什么人的解读最有效呢？聪明的同学已经猜到了，当然是雅思考官。考官的标准才是我们唯一 需要遵循的标准。而考官的标准去哪里找呢？毫无疑问，答案在剑桥雅思真题的范文。

我们现在用的最多的复习资料就是剑桥雅思的真题。大作文写作有一个明显的特点，那就是虽然话题多样，提问形式多变，但是常考的话题也就那么几个，从剑桥4-到剑桥8，包括A类和G类文章在内，共有30个题目，基本涉及到了过半数的雅思写作话题了。对于小作文，常见的四种图形--线图，饼图，柱图，饼图--以及两种不常见的图形--地图和流程图--每一种类型在剑桥真题当中都有所涉及。

因而，同学们再准备写作的过程当中首先要做的就是要将剑桥真题当真的9分考官范文做到熟读成诵，熟悉其写作套路，思维模式和常见句型。这样，我们就会发现，其实很多市面上写作参考书里面的分段理论，开头结尾段的理论，甚至一些常见的句型和短语，如in terms of, with regard to等，都来自于官方范文。这样，如何锻造出一篇高分作文，对我们而言将不再是秘密。

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二、这个是剑桥7 test4 的小作文,请大家帮忙改一下,谢谢啦

The given pie charts illustrate unites of electricity production by fuel score (coal, oil, natural gas, hydro power and nuclear power) in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.这里没能完全描述出图表的主要特征。

且首段过于简单，记住首段是面子，一定要写的漂亮。As can be seen from these charts, the units of electricity by different categories of fuel were various in two countries in the different years. Specifically, in 1980, approximately half of the electricity units were produced by coal ,which shared the same production with natural gas (only 25 units) in France. The electricity units/delete production by natural gas were 20 units in Australia. In terms of//用词不准确，和后面的半句意义一样，整句就是重复累赘，production by oil and hydro power , the units of electricity produced by hydro power were 20 units, which were four times /加greater/ than those in France, however, only 10 units of electricity were made/generated by oil in Australia, which were half of those in France. To our surprise , nuclear power made 15 units of electricity in France and none of any/the others contributed /as much to the electricity/power supply in France.In 2002, the majority of//不能这样用 electricity was produce/d by coal ( 130 units) in Australia, which still made the same quantity /units/删掉 （25 units） in France. Clearly, the dominant production of electricity was by nuclear power in France with the amount of 126 units. Natural gas and oil produced very little//口语化，书面语少用very// electricity (only 2 units) in Australia. The France had the/a similar quantity by natural gas and hydro power.Overall, these figures lead us to /the/ conclusion that coal is the major source to produce electricity in Australia while nuclear power played a significant role in production of electricity in France.我一直不知道小作文要怎么才能进步，每次都会超时，用大概25分钟才能写完，而且字数都超很多（超过200）。

请各位指导一下我，该怎么在不到一个月的时间内提高小作文。如何避免在把信息点都描述清楚后字数不会超。

万分感谢！！估计你小作文超时的原因有二，第一，不是很熟悉图表作文的套话，或者说写作模板准备不够，第二，对小作文的要求理解不到位，当然也有可能是你对如何抓住图表的main features的技巧掌握的还不娴熟。这也就导致你时间花的过多，且写出来的东西就像我们的伟大祖国一样，大而漏洞百出问题多多。

小作文就是要求短小精悍，150词能解决就不需要200或更多。多了反而更容易出错，所谓言多必失。

针对这样的问题，你可以首先多看些小作文的范文，掌握一些通用的结构和规律，在练习中提炼你自己的常用句型和模板，考试时能做到提笔就写拿来就用。再就是小作文要求得很清楚，抓住图表的主要特征进行描述就好，无需太过在意次要细节。

每个图表或者数据都是在讲一个问题，你要看出这个问题就好了，不需要面面俱到的。这篇文章你去对照一下后面的范文就知道其实要拿高分，完全不需要描述所有的信息点。

这个文章抓住电力增长很快，同时澳洲主要靠煤，法国主要靠核能这两个点就好了。如果你不确定是不是看图分析能力还不够的话，你可以先用中文写写小作文，或者把自己的小作文翻译成中文，然后给你的父母同学朋友看看，让他们评价一下你的文章在抛开语言的前提下是否完成了描述图表主要特征的任务。

如果没有，那你首先要考虑提高看图能力。相信在你理解了小作文的得分点和技巧后，会很快上手的。

还是那句话，雅思一点都不可怕，加油。

三、剑桥雅思全真试题4 第一篇小作文范文

The table gives a breakdown of the different types of family who were living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

On average, 11% of all households, comprising almost two million people, were in this position. However, those consisting of only one parent or a single adult had almost double this proportion of poor people, with 21% and 19% respectively.

Couples generally tended to be better off, with lower poverty levels for couples without children (7%) than those with children (12%). It is noticeable that for both types of household with children, a higher than average proportion were living in poverty at this time.

older people were generally less likely to be poor, though once again the trend favoured elderly couples (only 4%) rather than single elderly people (6%).

Overall the table suggests that households of single asults and those with children were more likely to be living in poverty than those consisting of couples.

T0T是不是这个，，累死我了

四、请帮忙批改雅思小作文,谢谢 能得几分,剑桥4 test4的小作文

Through observe first line chart 中式英语 From the first line chart 也比你这个好

they both steady grew from 12 millions to 20 millions 语法错误

smoothly grew

the UK people like to visit French and Spain very much. 老外不喜欢这样的语法 ，definitly prefer to visit

Obviously the British prefer visited to France than any other country

语法错误 prefer France than any

得分应该可以5.5 ，因为你用了不少插入语，句式还不错，否则只有5分了

五、雅思小作文开荒中,写了一篇,是剑桥4test4写作1 ,求指点,最好能

比较的线形图之间的年人口外国游客在英国和本土定居点上旅行，从1990年到1999年，加上一个柱状图具体刻画这些居民的分配在一个几个范围的国家于1999年。

首先，考虑到这两个几十年的发展，外出旅游人数的居民总是大，输出的输入的高速增长，外来的游客。尽管门槛，这些移民与当地山水乡情略多于外国人（12版本1000万年），前者更最终在接下来的七年山。

因此，从1982年开始，尽管有点推广海外的到来，国内的趋势大幅飙升，导致土著居民离开，直到1999年，有近似的两倍（5300万）为游客游客（2700万年）结束。 此外，从英国旅游者最喜欢的国家，它在1999年占法国，1000万年被授予“比例最高，其次是西班牙的流行，不到1000万人。

其余的都是美国（450万），希腊和土耳其（400万）（350万），分别作为一个整体，其人口仅相当于法国是特殊的。综上所述，英国的痕迹当地人出国，它们频繁地保持较高的增长速度比外来游客无与伦比。

另外，在英国旅游者选择的观点，大部分的法国风格。

六、雅思小作文求批改

6分到6.5分水平。

有些小语法错误，比如第二段开头 the number of **** and that of *** were increased， 这个应该用主动过去时态， increased 。对于line chart， 不仅要描写总趋势，还要描写一些突出的细节变化。

Bar chart，描写的很平凡，句式很普通，表达清晰，没什么错误，不好不坏。 最后一段 sharply rose ，副词来修饰动词。

句型的变换太普通，词语也没有什么活用的迹象。比如UK residents UK visitors UK travellers（双写l，雅思是英国人阅卷，偷懒单写l可能被心情不好的考官减分。

美国人懒得很才单写。） 这三个词可以有很多种形式表达， People travelled from UK, People from Britain。

总体而言没有什么亮点，也没什么大缺点，语句通顺，词汇适中，给个6.5差不多。没什么好改的，重写还差不多。

七、剑桥雅思6test2 小作文,高手来估分,谢谢

"per person per year" can be used in speaking but not academic writing.

You should not use "we" in academic writing as well.

"the chart describe us" is a translation of Chinese which has a grammar mistake. It should be "the chart tells us" but unfortunately, not in academic writing again. U may use "the chart shows that the trend of travelling more often than before。

What do u mean "As the car saw a dramatic growth"? I guess it's another grammar mistake.

"In sum" should be "in conculsion" or "In summary".

Generally speaking, your essay is not bad but it should not be scored over 6. One of the reason is that you just list all the figures rather than comparing them. For example, it would be much better if you said "Taxi is more popular because its recent figure is more than 3 times than the previous one."

The other reason is you didn't point out the trend that people prefer to go further. That's why the usage of car, long distance bus and taxi increases but walking and bicycle drops.

I suggest that you should spend 2-3 mimutes to analyse and find out the relationship between the figures first. Then you can start writing.

Practicing more helps you to improve your writing skill. Good luck and fighting!