一、英语作文批改谢谢thefristdayofschool.Iwasdisppointedatmyclassmates,

Today is my frist day of school.下面表达有点混乱，不知道你的意思.I was disppointed by my classmates, since they arrived until the school is finished they were talking all the time. That's really repugnanted me, especially in my classroom.I kown what should do, what should't.In order to changed my life, I must keep to it，（这里的IT是指什么？表达不清.）hang in there until I finish my study.Then,I sat at the frist row of the classroom.It's remain me what did together during our summer hoildays. （它提醒了我暑假一起做的事.It's指什么？together是和谁一起，和你做第一排有什么关系？完全看不懂哪里来的这一句）We now in different classes.如果说班级，用IN CLASSI wish both of us can successfully completed our studies .Come on brother! We certainly will succeed!Tommrrow belong to the real brave man!I believe in that!So should you！在你原文的基础上改的.修正了一些语法.你应该多看一些外国的小短文.了解外国人写作的习惯.你的句子的模式还很中国化，外国人可能很难理解.比如说，最后一句，我坚信，你呢？外国人不会这么讲，他可能会说，我坚信，你也应该相信！。

二、英语求批改啊

In all ages,Chinese believe that the red【the red改为red color】 means【means改为 stands for】 lucky【luck】，people think that 【it】will bring good luck to their child【children】.But in recent years,with the improvement of people's living standard,the number of the money in red envelopes are 【is】on the rise,people disagree with that.。

三、帮忙批改一下作文,认真批改哦,会加分.谢谢

I had to do the housework at the age of eight..I think hard-working will improve my own situation.AS an old saying goes“Spare the rod and spoil the child'.We can develop our skill when we were young .I had to go to school and cooked meals in the childhood.Nowadays,I can do anything on my own.It also means I have grown up .。

四、求英语达人批改作文（英专一年级）

第一行是题目吧 没有字数要求？我觉得这篇写得太短了.如果是普通作文的话，已经挺好的了，虽然是中国的那种固有格式（也太死板了- -！），但是没有错的地方.还有你到底想改哪里，语法和结构都没有问题的.以下只是个人的观点哦，文笔活跃了一点，改了的部分是大写的.I PERSonALLY DON'T AGREE with COMPANIES hiring employees for their entire lives.I CAN GIVE A LOT OF REASONS FOR THEM NOT TO DO SO.First of all,EVEN after UNIVERSITY graduation,students are STILL freshmen in the society.Frankly speaking,they aren't aware of the society sitution (WHAT KIND OF SITUATION?EXPAND)and "don't know well" (>>MAY NOT HAVE GIVEN MUCH THOUGHT) about their career.（去掉Therefore 没必要写）they may make wrong choices "which may lead to regrets in future"(WHICH THEY MIGHT REGRET LATER).(Besides 可以去掉！最后一段你不是也没写finally么，注意前后一致哦)，COMPANIES HIRING employees for their entire lives can limit employees' ability and development (of what?expand 不要老说半句话).If the employees CAN have the chance OF WORKING in different companies,more or less,they will BE ABLE TO tell the differences between companies and "learn something good and avoid something bad"(weak！比如什么？什么叫"好"，什么叫"坏"？这两个形容词太弱了).Furthermore（去了它如何？），they CAN GET more creative and CAN make more contribution to the company."Working in the same company for the entire lives" （有点重复的感觉……但好像又无法避免- ）can make employees not that positive as before.(MAY ConTRIBUTE NEGATIVELY TO EMPLOYEES' ATTITUDE)After all,they don't have to worry about if they will "be fired" (GET FIRED..or LOSE THEIR JOB。

) no matter how they behave.最后一段总结无可挑剔~如果能扩展开写写就更好了.。