1.英语作文改错

第二个my children后面加个more会更好一点我觉得，times改成time，还有“I would also allow them to go out on school nights 。”

这句是什么意思，如果你是想说我会同意他们在晚上出去，应该是I would also allow them to go out at night，后面那句有语法问题，应该是I think ,my children should learn to make decisions by themselves.最后一句给be后加a，这句虽然没错但是通常应该用set a good example to。不过你的也对啦，这篇语法错误很少，10分左右吧。

2.短文改错ADearJimI'

Dear Jim I'd like to tell you something more about our school sports meet.It was holding(holden) on Oct 6,which was a fine day.There were over 1,000 students and teachers attend (attending)it.Wang Lin,a student from(of) my class won the 100-meter race.He finish(finished) the race in 12.6 seconds and broke in(in删除) the school record.The spots meet was really success(successful).That Was (was)because we were all trying to do my (our)best. Althought I Was (was)not one of the winner(winners), I Was(was) proud of that(that变成what) we had done. Looking forward to receiving your letter Yours, Li Ping B A group of scientists were planning to go to countryside to do a scientific research in order to find out that (that删除)whether the environment of the country had(been) polluted.On arrival,they started to check the air and water.To our(their) surprise,they found how terribly(terrible) the situation Was.They could see the serious pollution.Look(looking) into the cause, they persuade(persuaded) the government to pass the law to protect(the) environment and kept the balance of nature. Now everything has (been)changed. Birds are singing while tree and grass are waving.。

3.英文短文纠错

In the castle ----改为 amother like pretty-----改为 likesShe meets a new friend Daisy-----改为metBut the princess thinks her life is boring. -----改为thoughtthe princess is boring-----改为bored demands to ------改为demanded she and Daisy see something of interest------改为sawThey play very long time-----改为playedWe should love nature,because we can happy. But we can't because money happy这句话语法不通，不知作者是什么意思。

还有，君子爱财取之以道，money是可以爱的，有点太绝对。