1.雅思c7t4小作文,求范文

The charts compare the sources of electricity in Australia and France in the years 1980 and 2000. Between these years electricity production almost doubled, rising from 100 units to 170 in Australia, and from 90 to 180 units in France.

In 1980 Australia used coal as the main electricity source (50 units) and the remainder was produced from natural gas, hydro power (each producing 20 units) and oil (which produced only 10 units). By 2000, coal had become the fuel for more than 75% of electricity produced and only hydro continued to be another significant source supplying approximately 20%.

In contrast, France used coal as a source for only 25 units of electricity in 1980, which was matched by natural gas. The remaining 40 units were produced largely from oil and nuclear power, with hydro contributing only 5 units. But by 2000 nuclear power, which was not used at all Australia, had developed into the main source, producing almost 75% of electricity, at 126 units, while coal and oil together produced only 50 units. Other sources were no longer significant.

Overall, it is clear that by 2000 these two countries relied on different principal fuel sources: Australia relied on coal and France on nuclear power.

2.雅思作文批改 剑四test4小作文 （高分求修改）

line graph -- curve graph/diagram

represents（代表，是有象征性的） -- shows/demonstrates

accompanying 去掉

some popular countries UK residents visit at the same time

during the years of 1979 and 1986 -- from 。 to 。

increased slightly from 10 millions to about 13 millions during 。

by UK residents 去掉

as people who traveled to England -- while/and

gradually -- steadily

from 12 millions to 20 millions at the same time -- 去掉at the same time：前面已经有Meanwhile

UK residents visited abroad -- visiting

which is peaking at -- peak at

who were coming to travel -- coming to travel

30 millions -- 30 million

until 1999 -- in ;or you can say: rose from 13 million until 1999(approximately 30 millions).

When study --studying/looking into/analysing

visited by UK residents 1999 -- 尽量不用被动

some European countries of France -- such as/like/eg。

of American and Turkey -- like

France by far the most popular -- is

choose to travel -- choose to travel in/choose/go to

comes the second country for UK residents to visit -- comes the second; " for UK residents to visit "删掉

which is little less -- a little

than that for France -- than those going to France

Somewhat surprising -- Somewhat surprisingly

traveled -- ing

recorded here as relatively low in the same chart -- are 。 the lowest。 in the chart

they are -- namely/that is/viz

3.请帮忙批改雅思小作文,谢谢 能得几分,剑桥4 test4的小作文

Through observe first line chart 中式英语 From the first line chart 也比你这个好

they both steady grew from 12 millions to 20 millions 语法错误

smoothly grew

the UK people like to visit French and Spain very much. 老外不喜欢这样的语法 ，definitly prefer to visit

Obviously the British prefer visited to France than any other country

语法错误 prefer France than any

得分应该可以5.5 ，因为你用了不少插入语，句式还不错，否则只有5分了

4.帮忙看看这篇雅思小作文有什么问题能拿几分剑桥4test2task1

The most dominant mode of travel in both years was by car,the travel distance of which experienced over 50% increase,from 3,199 miles in 1985 to 4,806 miles in 2000.The most dominant mode 是主语 was by car，作何解 experienced an over 50% increase,increase 是可数的Other ways of travel also rose 130 miles during the 15 years and remained the second most commonly used transportation,followed by taking train with an 80 miles/person/year increase by 2000.这句话让人confusingremained the second most which one remained the secondThere was a decrease of the use of local bus，句型很好，介词错误把of改为in结尾太简单。

5.【求好心的老师可以细批一下我的雅思作文100分送上作文是剑桥五text

The first chart illustrates what is the main reason for study among different age students. The second chart indicates how much support (is) received from employers in different age group. As can be seen, the percentage of those who study for career saw (sees) a fall with the age grown (grows). But ,while the percentage of (whose 改为 those) who study for interest is increasing and the proportion of employers support(s) hits a bottom in the age group (of) 30-39.(For those) Under 26, (the) proportion of those who study for career(s) (stand 改为 is standing) at 80% that (study) for interest (is) only at 10%. However , with the age grown (grows) that (study) for career decreases to just over 20% in (the) group of over 49 that (study) for interest rises to 70%.The proportion of employer support reaches at over 60% in the group of under 26, and experiences a downward trend ,bottom(s) at (just) over 30% in (the) group of 30-39, before rising (again), which grows to over 40% in (the) group of over 49.其实你写得非常之好，文体结构和语法运用正确，无须更改，只是有一些错漏，为了方便你可以知道错在那里，我用括号把修改了的括著.另外你问楼上为甚麽with the age grows 而不是with the age growing，这个你只要看你自己写的最后一句 which grows to over 40% in the group of over 49. 便应该知道是同一原因.还有一样要提醒你的是： that 和 which 的准确标点符号法.that 之前是不用逗号的，但which之前则一定要用逗号，这是一个重要的英语文法.请切记。

6.剑桥雅思全真试题4 第一篇小作文范文

The table gives a breakdown of the different types of family who were living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

On average, 11% of all households, comprising almost two million people, were in this position. However, those consisting of only one parent or a single adult had almost double this proportion of poor people, with 21% and 19% respectively.

Couples generally tended to be better off, with lower poverty levels for couples without children (7%) than those with children (12%). It is noticeable that for both types of household with children, a higher than average proportion were living in poverty at this time.

older people were generally less likely to be poor, though once again the trend favoured elderly couples (only 4%) rather than single elderly people (6%).

Overall the table suggests that households of single asults and those with children were more likely to be living in poverty than those consisting of couples.

T0T是不是这个，，累死我了

7.这个是剑桥7 test4 的小作文,请大家帮忙改一下,谢谢啦

The given pie charts illustrate unites of electricity production by fuel score (coal, oil, natural gas, hydro power and nuclear power) in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.这里没能完全描述出图表的主要特征。

且首段过于简单，记住首段是面子，一定要写的漂亮。As can be seen from these charts, the units of electricity by different categories of fuel were various in two countries in the different years. Specifically, in 1980, approximately half of the electricity units were produced by coal ,which shared the same production with natural gas (only 25 units) in France. The electricity units/delete production by natural gas were 20 units in Australia. In terms of//用词不准确，和后面的半句意义一样，整句就是重复累赘，production by oil and hydro power , the units of electricity produced by hydro power were 20 units, which were four times /加greater/ than those in France, however, only 10 units of electricity were made/generated by oil in Australia, which were half of those in France. To our surprise , nuclear power made 15 units of electricity in France and none of any/the others contributed /as much to the electricity/power supply in France.In 2002, the majority of//不能这样用 electricity was produce/d by coal ( 130 units) in Australia, which still made the same quantity /units/删掉 （25 units） in France. Clearly, the dominant production of electricity was by nuclear power in France with the amount of 126 units. Natural gas and oil produced very little//口语化，书面语少用very// electricity (only 2 units) in Australia. The France had the/a similar quantity by natural gas and hydro power.Overall, these figures lead us to /the/ conclusion that coal is the major source to produce electricity in Australia while nuclear power played a significant role in production of electricity in France.我一直不知道小作文要怎么才能进步，每次都会超时，用大概25分钟才能写完，而且字数都超很多（超过200）。

请各位指导一下我，该怎么在不到一个月的时间内提高小作文。如何避免在把信息点都描述清楚后字数不会超。

万分感谢！！估计你小作文超时的原因有二，第一，不是很熟悉图表作文的套话，或者说写作模板准备不够，第二，对小作文的要求理解不到位，当然也有可能是你对如何抓住图表的main features的技巧掌握的还不娴熟。这也就导致你时间花的过多，且写出来的东西就像我们的伟大祖国一样，大而漏洞百出问题多多。

小作文就是要求短小精悍，150词能解决就不需要200或更多。多了反而更容易出错，所谓言多必失。

针对这样的问题，你可以首先多看些小作文的范文，掌握一些通用的结构和规律，在练习中提炼你自己的常用句型和模板，考试时能做到提笔就写拿来就用。再就是小作文要求得很清楚，抓住图表的主要特征进行描述就好，无需太过在意次要细节。

每个图表或者数据都是在讲一个问题，你要看出这个问题就好了，不需要面面俱到的。这篇文章你去对照一下后面的范文就知道其实要拿高分，完全不需要描述所有的信息点。

这个文章抓住电力增长很快，同时澳洲主要靠煤，法国主要靠核能这两个点就好了。如果你不确定是不是看图分析能力还不够的话，你可以先用中文写写小作文，或者把自己的小作文翻译成中文，然后给你的父母同学朋友看看，让他们评价一下你的文章在抛开语言的前提下是否完成了描述图表主要特征的任务。

如果没有，那你首先要考虑提高看图能力。相信在你理解了小作文的得分点和技巧后，会很快上手的。

还是那句话，雅思一点都不可怕，加油。

8.剑桥雅思9里面的test4大作文,就是说现在很多语言在消失,有些人认

雅思作文任务完成度只占四分之一的成绩，而且一般而言你写啥观点都行，只要你能说通。所以正反都行，我习惯是写冷观点，和别人不一样，容易上分。不过具体看个人

我把我写作思路搬上来吧，你借鉴下

先说many people think this tendency will undermine the diversity of language seriously,yet I would state my objection to this issue after analyzing the following reasons.

第一段写the preservation of these rare language will waste plenty of funds which should be used in many other fields contributing to society.

然后写the disappearance of these language will remarkably benifit our daily communication.

第三段我喜欢先列反方观点然后反驳，some people may say the diversity of language is a sigificant part of our culture,however,the importance of it is especially exaggerated.

雅思写作主要还是语法单词架构，观点不能说不重要，但不必看的太重，真想不出来可以用网上的万能观点，联系经济社会教育等常见话题展开